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Discussion forum => Offtopic => Topic started by: loltation on January 26, 2013, 02:40:57 pm

Title: Need some honest words about something I have been writing
Post by: loltation on January 26, 2013, 02:40:57 pm
Before I begin to start talking about work, I want to make one thing very clear. This contains (and is focused around) ponies. If you don't like things involving ponies, or don't like bronies, that is fine. Please don't make a post for the sole purpose of saying something along the lines off "I hate you, grow up and stop watching a show for girls". Just don't. I decided to come here because I know the Opticraft community is respectable and honest, unlike certain other websites. Without further ado, here is the story:

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For any wondering, yes it does get better after the first chapter. I was experimenting with a romantic scene. Feel free to leave whatever you want about the story. Some constructive criticism wouldn't be bad either.
Title: Re: Need some honest words about something I have been writing
Post by: RuthlessTomato on January 26, 2013, 02:44:27 pm
This was really good. I think to appeal to most people though you should write about humans
Title: Re: Need some honest words about something I have been writing
Post by: DeeKay on January 26, 2013, 02:46:32 pm
This was really good. I think to appeal to most people though you should write about humans
You took 4 minutes to read that?
Title: Re: Need some honest words about something I have been writing
Post by: loltation on January 26, 2013, 02:47:48 pm
Had to be split into multiple parts due to a character limit but no matter.

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Title: Re: Need some honest words about something I have been writing
Post by: loltation on January 26, 2013, 02:48:37 pm
And the final part (maybe)...

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Title: Re: Need some honest words about something I have been writing
Post by: RuthlessTomato on January 26, 2013, 02:52:30 pm
This was really good. I think to appeal to most people though you should write about humans
You took 4 minutes to read that?
i read the beginning and skimmed over the rest.